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I am

a fear of love,
fear of rejection.

I am

a flawed face,
scratched at by tortured nails.

I am

a water stained mirror,
that sad souls wish to break.

I am

stretched white skin,
that tired fingers pull at in dismay.


Once full of life but abandoned,
greedy hands cracked open my fragile shell.
My heart a hollow space forcefully licked clean.

Leaving me

a fetal form, knees to chin,
wrapped in a patched up blanket
of bitterness and insecurities.

When will I be reborn?
I Was Worried...
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freezeframe666 Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2010
Invokes emotional reaction. NICE WORK:)
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amy-jae Featured By Owner Aug 28, 2010
Thank you :)
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PenguinRockMySocks Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2010
I really love

'greedy hands cracked open my fragile shell'

and

'a fetal form, knees to chin,
wrapped in a patched up blanket
of bitterness and insecurities.'

The emotion of this poem hit me when I read those lines.
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:iconamy-jae:
amy-jae Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2010
Thank you :)
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PenguinRockMySocks Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2010
No problem! :)
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cality Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I love the layout of your words, and the ending is perfect; the stanza:

'a fetal form, knees to chin,
wrapped in a patched up blanket
of bitterness and insecurities.'


is my favourite. :)
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amy-jae Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2010
Well I am glad that on my final edit I added in that part :). Thank you for the lovely comment!
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cality Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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vanhelsingfreak2 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2010
aaawwww thats sad DX
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:iconamy-jae:
amy-jae Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2010
Well because it's written from the viewpoint of someone in the middle of a deep depression ;). Thanks for the comment.
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vanhelsingfreak2 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2010
ur welcome my name is hannah hellow i have posted poems on my profile if u wanna go check them out
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londonrey Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2010
I really like the structuring of this and how you set it up. The ending tastes a little bitter and I love that about it. (:
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:iconamy-jae:
amy-jae Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2010
Thank you london :heart:. Yeah I still think there are one-to-many "I am's" but I already took out two haha.
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londonrey Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2010
:XD:
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creaking-door Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2010
A sad and inward looking piece that sees only the bad things. But well told and descriptive. :)
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:iconamy-jae:
amy-jae Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2010
I know :hmm:. It's what I get for writing when its cold and dreary out. Thank you for the comment :)
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creaking-door Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2010
Be warm and snug in! Welcomes. :)
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